Senior Position Format Enclosed- Feedback Request

Hi Everybody,

This is one of the most informative and cooperative board that I have come across so thanks to all of you for providing detailed information.

I am applicant from India and require feedback on the format for claiming my senior position. Request all of you to provide feedback on the format. I have an international MBA from one of the top 10 business schools and more than 8 years of post grad experience.
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This is to certify that Mr. Random is working with xyz (a Fortune top 10 company) since 2003 as Manager.

Key responsibilities of Mr. Random includes the following:

i. Leading a team for structuring and negotiating long term multi million dollar contracts
ii. Developing and implementing contract negotiations strategy
iii. Tracking various risks facing the organisation and advising on mitigation of key risks
iv. Allocating financial implications of various risks along the value chain and allocating risks across the chain in proportion of its returns

Fulfilment of these responsibilities involves analysing and managing complex arrangements and it also requires high quality postgraduate education with senior level experience.

Mr. Random is managing senior level responsibilities and is a highly valued employee of xyz.

Please feel free to contact me on 123456 for any queries.


Yours truly,
For xyz



daf
General Manager -

Good letter,..but you need to 'beef up' all the various points forexample

1)Leading a team for structuring and negotiating long term multi million dollar contracts
by doing the following
(a) negotiated a 2.5million dollar contract for the supply of xyz software to company xyz in Malaysia. Also attached is evidence of coprrespondence and I was signatory to the deal.

(b) negotiated a 1.5m $ contract on behalf of the Ministyry of xyz in india and the evidence of the 'deal' is shown beloiw


you need to beef up the tasks and explain to a 'lay' man how senior your role is...

...dont foirget senior roles always go with big wages. If you are negotiating such big deals as you claim then a local equivalent salary in excess of £3,500 poiunds (my guess) would be about right

Also tell how many employees you were in charge of and to whom you have reported (probably top manager).

since 2003 as Manager

Is this just a sample or is this really 2003. This could be too short a duration for Senior level experience period !

Chess, Mini, tnavon

Thanks guys for the feedback.

I will attempt to beef it up as suggested. I report to General Manager.

Breakup of my salary is as follows and request a feedback whether this is with what HSMP considers as senior level salary:

Total cost of company : 35,000 Pounds
Includes Car, Fuel, Medical benefits & Reitrement benefits. My last year's tax returns show it around 30,000 pounds and my salary certificate/letter from employer shows 35,000 Pounds.

My salary is broken into two parts; one comes in pay slip and other comes seperately (eventhough both are declared, official payment and taxed). So my salary slips show lesser amount and my bank deposits will have two different entries due to two different payment. Do you think this will be a problem?

Also in terms of my education: is it good enough to send official (original) transcripts received from college in a sealed cover and a notarised copy of my degree certificates (I am scared to lose them and hence do not want to send the originals degree certificates)

Thanks once again.

Cheers

Are you employed and applying from India ? cause if you are, then GBP30,000 or GBP35000 does not matter. Both put you in the middle bracket for claiming 35points.

For the degrees, all of us have faced this dilemma and taken a decision either way. It is preferable to send originals even though its a risk as we suspect currently heavy scrutiny is being done for documents' authenticity.

RANDOM, provide your clients address only if it is ok for your company, may be your company won't like to share its secrets. What if HO calls up your client and ask for details ?

In my opinion the best option would be your employment offer, where such details (regarding company your role, people under you) are mentioned. The appointment letter and the experience letter should serve the purpose. If you have some special atchivements better show it as atchievement letter.

I hope that helps.